Where did I mess up?

I kept it basic with what I wanted and went straight to the point like what the side bar said (probably did it wrong, that's why I'm asking).. I have a hard time keeping the conversation and end up double texting ( I know if she's not responding then move on!) . For about 10 matches last month with the same basic opening and setting a time and place, I always get left on read. Yes I can move on, or she's busy, or she's Quarantined, or I'm just simply fuckin ugly.. But anyways, I'm asking because I want to practice my game on tinder so when I do get a girls number from a club I won't mess up my chance when I texting her.