Could anyone critique my OkCupid, I'll send you the URL, women rate me a 7/10, maybe i'm doing something wrong. Help?

OmLaLa · 2015-09-29T16:36:30+00:00

women rate me a 7/10, maybe i'm doing something wrong.

"Watch what they do, not what they say." -A Smart Sum-Bitch

TDCRedPill · 2015-09-29T16:55:59+00:00

Sure. PM link, and make sure profile is set to public.

TDCRedPill · 2015-09-29T17:55:55+00:00

My take, with all of brutality I'd want someone to have towards me.

Picture 1. No man, get rid of it, get better. That pic makes you looks stoned, overweight, and boring. The facial hair is in exactly the wrong length; doesn't do anything to shape your face, just looks like you're someone who can't grow a beard and can't be arsed to keep it clean. Frames look cheap and not stylish; get contacts, and make sure to pick up a few pair of correction lenses with colors, especially strong bright colors. They're so fun to throw on occasionally, very cheap, and eye catching. But you look like a usual glasses wearer, so get new frames as well; I suspect you'll have better luck with thinner metal frames, but Im not experienced enough to be able to recommend a glasses shape that would accentuate your face. You're wearing a plain boring t-shirt with a bored look on your face, eyes barely open, and 'cant be bothered to give a fuck' in your dress, facial expression, eyes, posture, and grooming. It's not a good look.

Picture 2: This is far and away the sexiest part of your profile. I dont know if it's lucky lighting or what, but your build is a good one, and would be a panty dropper by itself with just a lil more work in the gym and diet. The smile may be a teensy bit too excited but that's nit picking.

Picture 3: Smile looks very disingenuous. Your eyes are at least open, but the smile doesnt reach your eyes. You can see how the shadows around your jawline give a lil more definition to your jawline; thats what you should be using the facial hair for, until you manage to cut enough to get rid of the baby fat.

Style wise suggestions: Better clothes for one. Pics 1 and 3 has standard issue t-shirts. No one gets wet for generic t-shirts. Better quality shirts, v-necks, notch necks. Something that looks like you give a damn.

Hair: The shape of your face comes across oddly ovaloid, and the shape of the hair on top ADDs to the pudgy curvature of your jawline. You can grow hair, so take the advice of a bald man and grow some damn hair. Check these out: http://besthairstylesforovalfaces.blogspot.com/2013/02/2013-hairstyles-for-men-with-oval-faces.html

You seem to be trying for similar to #6, but it's not big enough, and still isn't the right shape. You should be aiming for #4. But whatever you decide, no matter how it looks, make sure it looks like it was intentional.

Facial hair: Your facial hair doesnt seem to come in strong enough to warrant the 'scruffy' look; it just looks like a careless teenager, and you're a man damnit. If you're growing facial hair, do it, and use it to define your jawline. If you aren't or can't, keep that shit clean every day or every other day at worst.

Posing: Watch some youtube vids on posing. Just adjusting your jawline so it sticks out more will reduce the lil bit of youthful pudge and do wonders.

Smiling: The second pic is the only one with a smile worth putting on your face, because it's the only one that goes through your cheeks and into your eyes. The rest are obviously smiles that do not reflect how you feel when the photo was taken; congrats, your face photos are showing deception and faked happiness. Not a good foot to put forward. It's one thing to fake, it's another to fail at faking.

Profile:Well, there's nothing there. There's no 'you'. There's a little bit of how you're just like everyone else and like fun and happiness, but that's true of everyone. You say you're not part of the status quo, but no idea why you or anyone else might believe that.

And absolutely NO PASSION. There's zero passion. You say you're deep and then reflect on being deep while giving no reason for anyone to not think you're an interchangable geek, and we all know plenty of those.

Summary: Nothing of value here. Screw what you aren't, stand up straight and say who you ARE, and realize that 'Im not like other guys' is a crap line that'll make eyes roll. And it's the first thing in your profile.

What Im doing...: This says nothing except you're unemployed and about to finish school with little in the way of plans, security, excitement.

Good at: Good at reading? You excel at what many people consider a passive activity? What you consider good at reading non-fiction has the same smell as someone claiming they're good at watching TV because they catch tons of Sherlock stuff that goes overlooked. Hardly a career path or something that evokes respect, and will dry up the panties of even avid book fans. It also sounds weird considering your written profile ignores any kind of sentence structure.

Don't claim to be unique, unless you got reasons to back it up. If those reasons exist, they aren't present in this profile. It sounds like the 'not the status quo' line, and is an eye roller. It's cool to believe in yourself, if you have a reason. Those reasons aren't shown, so it falls flat.

Rest: Just empty stuff.

If you erased the entire profile except for pic #2, you'd have twice the response rate you will have now.

[deleted] · 2015-09-29T16:39:33+00:00

Pm me, im honest and have advised people before on their tinder profiles

Title	Could anyone critique my OkCupid, I'll send you the URL, women rate me a 7/10, maybe i'm doing something wrong. Help?
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Date	September 29, 2015 4:30 PM UTC (10 years ago)
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