give me feedback on my international men's Day video please. I want to make a better one next year

shit-zen-giggles · 2022-11-20T00:54:48+00:00

First, I think the music was especially good. People often fail to recognize how much the audio makes or brakes a video, you did a good job there 🍒🍒🍒

On the selection of scenes:

I think you struck a good balance of 'traditional' vs 'non-tradtional' manly things 👍

I also like that you asked the men you pictured to display things they enjoy rather than narrowly focussing "men's utitlity / contribution to society" as this type of videos often do. 👍👍👍

see also Men as an End in Themselves

I think the approach of selecting scenes recorded by men you know personally is a good approach, since it keeps it authentic and protects from going into stereotypes or resorting to 'hyper polished' stock footage. It's also a great meta message about friendship given the lonliness epidemic among men. I'd recommend to carve out and emphasize that aspect more.

Your already mentioned your intention to add more of your own recordings for the next video to get a more consistent quality of footage. I think it's a double edged sword. I like the collage vibe. I'd rather double down on it by compiling all of those different styles and qualities into a giant pixel scape like the one done in 2pac's changes video here. This would also give you an opportunity to convey to the viewer a 'big picture' / message (see below).

What I'd suggest is: Keep the self recorded scenes but bolster it with footage you take yourself exploring / visiting / depicting men in your local community. This would give you an opportunity to go outside your social circle and create an even more wholistic / rounded picture, including some of the more traditional yet not so glorious roles / domains men do to keep society functioning. Thus honoring the men who keep your personal lifing conditions up and running.

Finally, I'd add some short text panels explaining your vision / message. The biggest shortcoming of this video, from my perspective, is that it comes across a bit unmotivated / incoherent which is a common effect with collage type videos and leaves the viewer a bit confused and lost. So this is something, I'd definitely suggest you could improve upon, maybe using the pixel scape approach refered to earlier and emphasizing friendship as a sort of leitmotif.

Hope this was helpful / the kind of feedback you were looking for.

Keep up the good work 👍

63daddy · 2022-11-19T22:54:06+00:00

Most importantly: I applaud you in your effort and time in producing this video. What I really like is you show many short clips of what being a man entails. I loved the inclusion that men can and do sew! I liked you show men care, the dog clip for example. I think you did a great job with scene length: long enough to make your point without wasting viewer time.

My suggestions for making your good video even better:

Cut some of the redundant clips or clips that are less clear.

Show more of men doing dangerous work, fighting our wars, etc. Project it’s men who build our infrastructure and protect us from threats.

Similarly add more video of men raising family, being a good husband, and provider for family. A dad playing with his infant daughter, giving his bride an engagement ring, etc.

You could similarly show it’s mostly men who clean up environmental disasters. Show a clip of men containing an oil spill and cleaning oil soaked birds for example.

I wouldn’t make your video longer. I’d cut redundant or not so strong segments to add more diversity.

To be clear, I mention some potential improvements, but it’s a great video as is. It moved me and I’m not really an emotional guy. Lastly, your efforts mean little if few see the video, so consider how to make it visible, though I lack any specific advice in that area.

hehimCA · 2022-11-23T01:22:33+00:00

Great job. Nice to see an artistic approach to International Mens Day. Well done!

Title	give me feedback on my international men's Day video please. I want to make a better one next year
Author	cistacea
Upvotes	18
Comments	8
Date	November 19, 2022 10:05 PM UTC (3 years ago)
Subreddit	Posted in /r/MensRights
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