Trying to figure out what works on an OKC profile. So ar re-wrote first two sections. Any ideas or hints?

hefnetefne · 2011-09-26T14:08:45+00:00

Right away you come off as crass and highly opinionated, immaturely sarcastic.

The snowflake thing makes no sense, and the idea of normal just came out of the blue.

Don't mention the ADD.

imo, stop trying to filter out those who might fall into your prejudices. That's not what a profile is for.

anyway, didnt get far. someone else finish this

puaCurveBall · 2011-09-26T15:53:48+00:00

Cut 80% of the text and leave out the trite "Fight Club" parts.

Change all the negative parts to positive things about yourself, like "I don't think you can substitute churches for conscience" or "I like people that can actually type complete sentences"

2011-09-26T19:48:51+00:00

I went ahead and changed it up, making it less douchey and less wordy.

TheEllimist · 2011-09-26T21:13:01+00:00

TL;DR

Shorten it up, no one wants to read a fucking essay when they visit your profile. The profile is there to catch the girl's interest and make her want to meet you in person, not to let her get to know you over the internet.

sillymallard · 2011-09-26T23:38:22+00:00

Perhaps it would be more beneficial for everyone if someone here knew of examples on the internet of good online dating profiles. Does anyone have any sources/examples?

Title	Trying to figure out what works on an OKC profile. So ar re-wrote first two sections. Any ideas or hints?
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Date	September 26, 2011 12:21 PM UTC (14 years ago)
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