I made this flier in PAINT.NET. Did I rely on too little sources? Should I grab more or is it enough?

Imnotmrabut · 2016-04-20T00:32:30+00:00

You have a lot of words there and multiple issues mixed up. Homelessness + Homicide + sentencing disparities +++++

Readers will be confused and think they are all related when they are not. One does not cause the other. It's best to work on impact.

People are very bad at reading, so they need focused info - on One Subject.

AVfM is not a source of Data they only report Data so it;s best to tell people what the source is not what AVfM says about it. This site https://notehub.org/hpp2i is a good starting point for digging out sources and resources.

Also there is a Growing Pot of sources on Reddit at https://np.reddit.com/r/mensrightslinks/ lots of high-quality academic peer reviewed materials that get the juices flowing.

I'd look to use DTP software on your own system and avoid online systems.

I've been dealing with the same issue recently on this thread Click Here

TBFProgrammer · 2016-04-20T03:01:54+00:00

I just want to stress the need for quality sources. News sites and blogs and the like are second-hand sources, at best. You want your sources to be as close to the generation of the data as reasonably possible. For one thing, this makes it harder for biased positions to gain traction against honest data. Not impossible, but harder. The other primary benefit is that the lack of chained references ensures that statistics and factoids pulled from thin air fail to garner the veneer of legitimacy (eg. rule of thumb). By maintaining rigour in these ways, you help elevate the average level of the discourse, which is absolutely critical if you wish to overcome an foe that has managed to entrench its fallacies in an esteemed position.

Tl;dr: you're opponents have academics devoted to twisting research to fit their position. To defeat them, you must foster a culture that is academically savvy.

deez_nuts_730 · 2016-04-20T14:02:52+00:00

A good rule of thumb is one source per fact. That way you have more in depth citation for each point. also, each point should have a number attached to it, like your first three. And finally, use VERY credible sources: FBI, CDC, and so on. Adviceformen is not going to help you convince anyone of anything because people will see it and think it is just biased and skewed information.

Impacatus · 2016-04-19T23:40:49+00:00

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accidental_me · 2016-04-20T07:26:09+00:00

paint.net redirects to http://www.warrenpaint.com/ which is online shop selling paints.

TheDude41 · 2016-04-20T10:35:06+00:00

The comment about revealing clothes doesn't belong. Try something else more logical.

TheDude41 · 2016-04-20T10:51:37+00:00

Grammar problems:

"62% of the homeless is male" should be "62% of the homeless ARE male."

http://www.englishpage.net/showthread.php?12247-50-percent-is-are

This sentence is grammatically incorrect: "MEN WHO ARE FALSELY ACCUSED WILL ALSO SUFFER SOCIAL SHAME AND RISKS IMPRISONMENT AND BEING LABELED AS A SEX OFFENDER."

Try, "MEN WHO ARE FALSELY ACCUSED SUFFER SOCIAL SHAME, RISK FALSE IMPRISONMENT, OR MAY BE LABELED FALSELY AS AN OFFENDER."

TheDude41 · 2016-04-20T10:54:39+00:00

In keeping with the theme of showing that men are socially disadvantaged, I suggest the following for the 5th sentence:

"Men are sentenced more severely than women for the same crime."

DevilishRogue · 2016-04-20T11:18:44+00:00

The last line makes it an us v them thing rather than a "this is a problem everyone can acknowledge" thing and your entire argument would be strengthened by removing it.

Nulono · 2016-04-21T02:18:29+00:00

*too few

Title	I made this flier in PAINT.NET. Did I rely on too little sources? Should I grab more or is it enough?
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Date	April 19, 2016 11:37 PM UTC (10 years ago)
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